Response Blog
Paolo Morales
9/26
The
first blog I read was by Nicole Galvin. She wrote about the same area as I did,
and so I thought it would be nice to compare what each of us had to say about
the area. The first thing I noticed was that she had a hook on her
introduction, while I just dove straight into talking about my area. She also
uses second person, which I think was a great idea because I feel that second
person really engages the reader. Though she uses all capitals on a word and
drags the letter at the end of a word. I.E: SOOOOO and Ahhhhhh. Also, she
listed all the offices in the building so students get a pretty good idea of
what the building was made for. She also put a map of the east campus which was
a great idea so incoming students will have a better idea of where Student
Service Building is located. Overall I really liked Nicole’s blog. I thought it
was well thought out and does a good job in grabbing the reader’s attention.
The picture’s she chose are a great add-on since they are supplemental to the
blog. She also somewhat fulfilled the main goal, which was to link the mission
statement to the area we are observing. The only times I’ve been to SSB was
during orientation, and to pick up my U-Pass. Personally, I cannot link the
mission statement with SSB so far because I don’t need financial aid. Although
I know many people that receive it so I know this building is beneficial to
many students
Next
was Yessica Huizar’s blog post on Area 2. First thing I noticed was that it
looked a bit short, but maybe because she didn’t post her Word file on the
blog. She also started out with an introductory paragraph. She has multiple
building is her area, the UIC Theatre, Education, Performing Arts and Social
Work Building, and Behavioral Sciences Building. She does a good job explaining
what they look like and where they’re located. She also implements multiple
quotes from people she interviewed and puts them in the correct spot. She
doesn’t link the mission statement with her area and didn’t put pictures of the
buildings. Overall, I thought she did a good job. She could have elaborated on
each building, but she did a good job of describing and telling us where
they’re located. She also has to add a picture. I’ve only been to the
Behavioral Sciences Building during orientation. That’s where we had all the
speeches and most meetings. From what I’ve heard is that the building is pretty
confusing so I’m glad that I don’t have any classes in there. I’ve never been
to the UIC Theatre, and the Education, Performing Arts, and Social Work
Building because my major (Biological Science) doesn’t require me to take those
types of classes. I don’t even know where their located so I have no
experiences at those buildings. But I know that all of these buildings provide
for students education obviously and so I think that it does relate to UIC’s
mission statement.
The
last one I read was by Alyssa Salemi on Area 5. She observed the UIC Resident
Halls. She jumped right into talking about the resident halls, just like what I
did. She wrote it in first person and gives great detail on how it is living in
the dorms. She describes the sounds she hears while she walks down the
hallways. She also gives her advice of how she became to familiarize herself
with the dorms. She lacked describing the James Stukel Towers, and Marie
Robinson Hall. She didn’t add any quotations though, but has a couple of
pictures. She also linked her area with the UIC mission statement. If I haven’t
mentioned it earlier the statement is, “To provide a wide range of students
with the educational opportunity only a leading research university can offer”.
Overall, I thought that Alyssa did a
good job of describing one of the dorm halls, but could have done a better job
on describing JST, and MRH. She added two nice pictures of the buildings, and
did a good job of talking about the history of the area she observed and linked
the mission statement with it. I live in Commons West so I have a bit of
knowledge of it. There are many floor activites that residents can go to, and
my peer mentor is a math tutor, so I could go to her for help for math whenever
I need it. I think that dorming represents UIC’s mission statement well because
I feel that it only helps students with their educational goals because they
have multiple resources within the buildings for school help and also their
located within campus and so that means students are close to the library and
the offices of professors. It’s easy access for learning and studying. There
has been many times where I studied in dorms with other classmates.